I am a Year 5 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughul - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Ka pai, good work having a go at a descriptive paragraph Cairo. I like how you have used hyperbole. I wonder where you could add more full stops?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Cairo I really like your story because it has a lot of detail and descriptive writing, I like to read more from you.
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